The mistake that comes to mind is that they use too many words.
Most first novels and poems would benefit by taking a big red pen and crossing out a lot of unnecessary words.
Because readers want to read a story or poem without the distraction of the extra words that people normally use when speaking.
In other words, writing is different from speaking, and that’s a lesson good writers eventually learn.
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Hi Florence, I always enjoy reading your blog, you always have Great advice and it is greatly appreciated! I Love poems and i have written a few of my own from lots and lots of years gone by. God Bless you . Thank you so much and you have a Great weekend.